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Friday, January 05, 2007

The Importance of Rewriting

I recently picked up a book by literary agent Noah Lukeman. It's titled The First Five Pages. It's not a book on how to write, instead it focuses on why manuscripts are rejected and observations from the perspective of an agent. It's an interesting read and I'm taking my time to think about the different points and bits of advice Mr. Lukeman shares.

I thought over the next week or two I'd comment on areas that stick out to me. The first item that caught my attention was this:

"There is no such thing as a great writer; there are only great re-writers. As you've heard before, 90 percent of writing is rewriting. If first drafts existed of some of the classics, you'd find many of them to be dreadful. This process of rewriting draws heavily on editing. And editing can be taught. Thus the craft of writing, inspiration aside, can to a great extent be taught."

I can't speak for all writers, but, I know the first time I sat down to write I had a vision. I could see myself typing furiously; the words would flow and I would create a novel with riveting characters and a fascinating plot.
Ha ha ha ha

You know what I figured out? Putting words on paper is easy. Making those words mean something and capture a reader is much more difficult. I am still a novice, but I've learned much of my craft since that time. The one lesson that was hardest for me to learn was rewriting. I still wrestle with it.

I started as a reader and then turned writer. I had admired the creativity and the skill of authors. I wanted to be one of them. I wanted to be able to create a whole new world that other people might enjoy. I put pen to paper... and met disappointment. My brilliant novel wasn't that brilliant. The idea was there, but the words were not. I've mentioned the inner editor before and it was in that first attempt of a novel that I met him. For a year I lingered on less than 5,000 words. I edited. I rewrote. I changed. I never progressed. And this brings me to two points that I keep in mind while I write.

The first draft is crap.
This is my mantra while I write. I say this not to create a sense of defeat. Instead, it brings awareness. In my mind, I often think about what the final product should be. It should flow well, have a strong voice, be active and progress my story. When you glance over fresh prose, often it is lacking. You see where a transition is missing. You see that what you've written doesn't compare on any level to the published books you've recently read. It won't. The published book sitting next to your bed has been edited at least a dozen times, it's gone through beta readers, and it's gone through an agent's eyes and an editor. Never sit down and expect your first draft to be level with a published work. When you realize it's not "as good" as that, don't let it stop you.

Patience is a virtue.
Rewriting is critical for your novel, especially if you want to be published. You must take the red pen in hand and slash. Your first draft is the ugly lump of stone you found on the river bed. The rewriting carefully cleans it, polishes it and finally sculpts it into the work of art that will be admired by the masses. The masses have not seen the pain and frustration. They only see a final product that is breathtaking in form and beauty. Timing is key. The urge to begin rewriting hits as soon as you complete the sentence or paragraph or page. You must cage that urge until the proper time. For me, this is difficult. Every time I open my document, I want to begin editing. I allow myself little edits here and there and try to make note of things I want to change... but many of the changes and edits are cosmetic. They are the smoothing and the enhancing. First, I must finish. Then I will let myself get down to the nitty gritty of sculpting.

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Wednesday, January 03, 2007

Book Review: Myrren's Gift

I give it a 2 out of 5

Recently, I picked up a book written by an author I didn't recognize. Myrren's Gift by Fiona McIntosh was published by EOS publishers, a division of Harper Collins. The author lives in Australia and the book first circulated there.

This story is a fantasy and part of a trilogy called The Quickening.

The plot in a nutshell: The story revolves around a young man, Wyl. He inherits a high ranking position in the king's army. The antagonist is the king's heir. Wyl shows mercy on a dying witch, Myrren. This witch then gives Wyl a gift.

The gift protects Wyl's soul and basically, he can't die until his life is where Myrren believes it should be (although, you don't find out that last tidbit until book 2). When someone kills Wyl, his soul is yanked from the dying body and enters the body of the one who killed him. This premise is very interesting. The story kept my attention simply because I was interested in seeing how the "body swapping" would progress. The antagonist plays his part well, the reader hates him. Although, the antagonist is almost too much. There are no redeeming qualities, there is nothing about the antagonist that makes him seem real to me. He's just there to be as evil as possible to give the hero someone to fight.

I read book one and book two and I'll probably finish the trilogy. I really hate leaving a story unfinished. However, there are some definite cons to this series. First, the first book starts with characters jumping point-of-view halfway through a paragraph. I don't mind pov switches... but I like them broken by chapter or at least scene. The first few chapters include so much exposition and back story I found it surprising the book was published. This is a trilogy that includes quite a bit of tell, not show. There were so many uses of "was" and "had" I kept thinking... "wow, ok, my writer buddies would be all over this." There are some plot holes and some things that just strike a wrong tone with me.

One of the main characters is a young gong boy, age 10, very small who cleans the poop shoot. I enjoy the character and I think he's interesting... BUT, there is no way he ever, EVER appears to be a child. His thoughts, his speech, his behavior, his acceptance - all sound like an adult. Even if he had a hard life, even if he was gifted with some special ability... I just couldn't suspend my belief on that character.

If you like body swapping stories or if you are on the lookout for a new trilogy to read. You may want to give this trilogy a shot. I think the 2nd book was written a little better and hopefully future books would be tighter and flow better. I probably won't read anything more of this author, but I'm sure others will enjoy it. Oh, I should add a little warning though. This is definitely mature content, it includes torture and rape. In fact, Wyl gets raped while he's a woman... or at least, I think he was raped. It gets a little confusing around that part. I wasn't very comfortable with it and it left a sour taste in my mouth.

Here's an excerpt from early in book one. The story is mostly in Wyl's point-of-view but bounces around to whoever is near Wyl. In this scene Celimus, the heir, has defeated Wyl in a competition and he's claiming "virgin's blood" - he wants to take Ylena, Wyl's sister, to bed before she marries Wyl's best friend:

Magnus opened his eyes and nodded, hardly daring to believe that Wyl might have taken his hint as to how to foil Celimus's plan.
Wyl straightened. "Sire, apologies, I do believe there has been a misunderstanding here."
"Oh?" Magnus replied, hope suddenly flaring in his heart.
Wyl nodded gravely. He looked at Celimus. "My Prince, as her only living relative, I cannot permit you to choose Ylena."
Celimus's smile faltered, turning into a sneer. "I'm not sure your familial ties override the royal claim, Thirsk. Step aside."
Gueryn's eyes narrowed. He had no idea what was going on here and he could only pray that Wyl knew what he was doing.


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Saturday, December 23, 2006

Rashenbo Reviews the Blog: Waking Jonas

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Waking Jonas is a blog that I would categorize as personal/humor.

The Rating Scale: 1 = Dreadfully dull 5 = Alright 10 = Awesome! I'm so jealous.

The Title:
At a glace, one might say... "Waking Jonas, hmmm what is special about this title?" At first, I just give the title a 4-5. However, this is one of those titles that as you read the content - you realize it has a meaning and the title wasn't really made to grab attention from a list. From the about page, this is a little tidbit to think about regarding the title:

jonas was a kitty who had many adventures with me. his life was short but he was loved very much. the site was named after a lonely afternoon where i found myself so in need of attention that i woke him up from his afternoon nap. what are cats for? a captive audience.

I'm not a cat person, but even I think this is sweet and it changes my thoughts about the title... and gets at least a 6.

The Layout
Ah, the joy of Word Press... I see some great Word Press blogs. I'm even thinking of starting up a blog for my husband and using Word Press. The layout here is simple and clean. No flashy colors or annoying backgrounds. I like the sidebar on each side of the content here. Sometimes having the two sidebars limits the width of the main content column - but I think the spacing is good here. I think it could be a little more "catching" or unique so I only give it a 6ish... but it is nice and it's easy to navigate - that's always a plus.

The Sidebars
Those of you familiar with my reviews know I like to see links, widgets, something in the sidebar. I think it makes the site more interactive and gives the reader more opportunity to spend time on your site surfing through your options. I have to say that I love the little ninja in the sidebar. It makes me happy. Maybe I need my own blog ninja?

Waking Jonas has some nice little images on the sidebar. The sidebars are organized nicely. Site navigation and widgets to the left... link love to the right. Course... I did notice that I'm not on the link love (/sigh) but it's ok. No points are deducted if you don't mention me! The comic links are a great little area to surf around - I know... I spent some time surfing through there.

I also liked the sleeping pose widget. I noticed it when I saw WJ during the nablopomo competition - I even posted my own in one of my blog posts. She's got quite a few things for readers to click on, surf through and visit so that chances of a reader hanging around longer is a little better. I give her at least an 8ish - (and this is not higher because my personal preference is to see a little more than what she's got). Other people don't... but they can do their own review and give a 10 if they want! :)

Blogosphere Presence
It's good for bloggers to get involved in the blogosphere... through links, through community blogs, through widgets that join folks together, etc. I don't rank it, but I always check on blogs I review. Her blog is on technorati and she's got a few sites that link her through technorati - like Testament to Youth in Verse. She's on BlogHer (a blog community I'm also a member of and recommend) and she's got some Flickr action happening. Looks like she's been having some fun! :) With the history of blog posts, I'm sure there is more of her out there in the blogosphere. Although, it could probably be improved - if that's what she wanted.

Now... to what we all know and love...

The Content

The first post appeared waaaaay back in April of 02... yeah, 2002. That's got to be one of the earliest dates in an archive I've seen... at least among the general population of bloggers. Kudos on the history. The posts are frequent... the posts are often short. Sometimes they are funny... and sometimes I had no idea what she was talking about! And, some of them are cute! I particularly enjoyed the recent post regarding the Christmas Plague and Kitty Mittens.

Overall, there are some nice posts here... some of them definitely had more of a "quick mental note" feel to them. I know the writing style and structure is intentional (read the about)... but I did find it a little distracting from time to time... that's probably my inner editor rearing it's head. I like the use of images in the posts... but if the goal is to increase reader awareness and blogosphere presence... there may be some room for improvement with post content. Now, that's just me... others may disagree... but I think I have to go with just a 5ish for the overall content. Not that there isn't some great content in there... it's just a little hard to find.

As always, I appreciate the time I spend on blogs. This is my opinion. I'm not an expert, I'm just sharing my thoughts. I tend to review a blog each Saturday. I keep a list and pull in the order of receipt. If you would like me to look at your blog. Click the "Rashenbo Review Me" link in my sidebar.

Cheers!



Updated to reflect the new URL.

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Saturday, December 09, 2006

Rashenbo Review's Bite The Rabbit


Bite the Rabbit is a blog that I would categorize as personal or a blom (blogging mom).
The Rating Scale: 1 = Dreadfully dull 5 = Alright 10 = Awesome! I'm so jealous.

The Title: Bite The Rabbit
I find this title just great. I give it a 9 for sure! If this blog were on a list and I was just looking at blogs because of the title - I'd definitely hit it just to see what it was about... but then, I have a slightly morbid sense of humor. The reason for her title is found in this post from her early posting months.

The Layout (also known as the "look & feel"): Typepad standard template
It's been a while since I used typepad, but I'm thinking this is just one of the basic template styles that's been personalized a bit with colors and header image. The header image is good and I like the color scheme: colorful, but without over doing it. This layout is nice, neat and tidy. Categories and archives keep things organized and it's easy to navigate through her blog to see past activity. I give her layout a 6.5 - it's a very pleasant look and feel.

The Sidebar:
Well, I'm gonna have to go with a 5 here. She's got a cartoon button, which is nice, and of course, she's got her Nablopomo button and she's got some links to other bloggers. I like theway categories are handled and links to recent comments is also kind of nice. But, it just seems a little empty and I'd like to see just a little more either with buttons or images or something of the like to get some more interactivity going.

Blogosphere Presence:
Well, a lot more people mention biting the rabbit in their blogs than I expected. I had a hard time finding her on Technorati, not sure she's there. If other blogging tools are used (exchange, blog lists, sitemeters, blog counters, etc) they aren't displayed. I certainly found her in the Nablopomo archives and she won the sock monkey - lucky little bunny! Kicky boots, Sgt. Pepper (her sister if you read through her posts - you'll discover this tidbit too!), and Teresa's Scrapbox are a couple of blogs that keep an eye on Bite the Rabbit. She's out there and she's making the rounds. She might just be a little bit harder to find that some of those SSP's (shameless self-promoters, one of Susan's terms), but she's not invisible.

Now, on to what we all know and love...

The Content

The first post was circa early 2005, a lovely little tale about a trip to Disneyland. The way she blogs makes me think this wasn't her first blog post but I can't find any earlier posts on this blog. Heheh, one of her early posts about cooties was cute and humorous and it makes me wonder when she might have continued that discussion! Her paintballing games sound like way too much fun! And she totally disgusted me with the booger post... I have this thing about boogers... it dates back to my brownies days when several girls were squashed together in a vehicle coming back from camp. One of them wiped a booger on another girl... the puking started and I've been booger traumatized since. Really - my husband has to wipe my kids' noses... I just can't stomach it. So thank you Rabbitgirl for bringing that memory back to me :)
Basically, I really enjoyed browsing through the posts. Many of them were funny, interesting or just darn cute! She's got a strong writer's voice that comes across in her posts and I could "hear" her telling me many of her tales. She has some great posts of her offspring but the blog isn't flooded by all things Harrison. There are plenty of other topics to enjoy.

If you haven't swung over to her site by now, give her a look see and enjoy yourself while your there. I give her content at least an 8!

If you'd like me to take a peek at your blog and possibly get a Saturday highlight - let me know.

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Saturday, December 02, 2006

Rashenbo Reviews The Cheese Party

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The Cheese Party is a blog that I would categorize as personal or a blom (blogging mom).

The Rating Scale: 1 = Dreadfully dull 5 = Alright 10 = Awesome! I'm so jealous.


The Title Cheese Party - I give it a 6.
The title is interesting and most folks enjoy a good slice of cheese. I happen to live near the cheeseheads (Wisconsin) so cheese tends to catch my eye more often than not. With that said, I think it's an ok title. It doesn't grab me so much that I would stop my surfing and say, goodness... that title makes me want to stop and go there - right now! But I like it better than "Amy's Blog".

The Layout Pink & Green Flowers by Zoot - I also give it a 6.
I like the design. It has an easy navigation and the header is different from the basic blogger templates. It's a free blogger template made by Miss Zoot so it's not so unique that I haven't seen it a few times lately. I am actually considering having someone design a template for me (one that works with beta blogger) so I'm on the lookout for nice designers. Miss Zoot certainly has some nice ones in her portfolio.

The Sidebar On the empty side - I give it a 4.
Now then, I'm a blogger that likes having more of an interactive experience. I like having buttons and icons to look at and click through. Other bloggers may not and may prefer a "cleaner" sidebar. Take my comments with that grain of salt. Amy is in the blogger chicks blogroll and she's got a few links I recognize. I see she uses feedburner and sitemeter - two of my favorites. I see she's also involved in Blogtopsites - not something I'm all that familiar with. There were minimal ads, which was nice. I don't like to be overloaded by ads. I was able to do a little surfing off her site, but not as much as I typically am able to off other bloggers that offer up a few more "pretties" or "goodies" (as I like to call them).

Blogosphere Presence Not quite out in the open.
Bloggers like bloggers - we all want readers. One of the tricks to getting more readers on your site is to become a reader of a blog that has more traffic or visitors than your own. I've picked up many readers because I've seen their comments on a mutually favored blog and then surfed over to them... and then created a little blog relationship. One of the things I look at is how "in" the blogosphere someone might be. I am certainly not widely known - so I don't rate this area... it's just an interesting observation that I make. I did some google and technorati searches and didn't get many hits for The Cheese Party. But, Amy is making the rounds and getting noticed. Amy inspired another person to start blogging. She's involved in many mommy blog areas. She's a fan and reader of Zero Boss - one of my new favorite blogs. She's also in a blog exchange. I'll have to ask her how that has been for her. I would think it might be interesting.

The Content

What it all comes down to. If you've got good content... those other things don't matter much. Amy's first blog post was on June 12, 2005. She began blogging when she and her Dr. SOB decided to have a child. Her blog chronicles the time before she was pregnant, her pregnancy, and now the growth of their son. She is far braver than I - she shares photographs of her tummy - stretch marks and all! She blogged the day her water broke. She has some lovely posts about her family, her friends, and her child. Of the recent posts, the one about her grandparents was touching.

The content at The Cheese Party was worth my visit. I found that I enjoyed reading through the archives and looking back at the transition from wife to mother-to-be to mommie. As a mother that's something I can relate to. Amy has a nice sense of humor and I could feel it as I read through many of her posts. Her blog entries are easy to read and fluid and sounds like she's just conversing with friends. It helps create welcoming posts. I give the content a 7.5.

Amy, it was a pleasure to visit your blog and read through your posts and your experiences. I look forward to seeing more of you in the blogosphere. Thank you for sharing this little bit of yourself with the rest of us.

Disclaimer: I'm not an expert in anything. The reviews that I do of blogs are just a reflection of my thoughts and opinions. Blogging is very subjective. What appeals to me may be something that others dislike... the reverse is also true. If you'd like me to take a look at your blog email me at rashenbo at gmail dot com.

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Thursday, November 30, 2006

But Rashenbo, you didn't review my site!?!?

Fear not, grasshopper. I am a blogaholic. I surf the mighty waves of blogginess and always like to find new little treasure blogs. Somehow I've developed the desire to continue checking out my fellow bloggers and I will probably try to feature a blog (just one - not 212) every month. Who knows, maybe I'll do it more frequently. I'm just not sure yet. Edit: So far, I'm reviewing a site each Saturday.

I know that I love to shamelessly promote my site... so if you would like to send me your blog for review - go right ahead or promote one of your friends' blogs. Rashenbo at gmail dot com and just do me a favor and put "review me" or "blog for your review" in the subject.

Bloggers are writers, after all, and this is a blog for writers so if you've got a blog you're eligible!

Note:

I have a pretty thick skin and am not easily offended, but I would like my reviews to be of material I can actually share with my readers. Porn or heavily offensive sites may be immediately tossed.

Past Reviews

Cheese Party
Bite the Rabbit

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